1. I think Nicole’s strongest analytical work can be found in her latest post entitled Grey’s Anatomy in the News. In particular I liked the paragraph about how a gay actor is portraying a straight character that is often accused of being gay. What sets this post apart as Nicole’s strongest is that she focused on analyzing a specific character in depth, so she was able to spend more time analyzing issues.
2. Since Nicole’s best work came when she kept her focus specific I would suggest that Nicole try and find a way to apply one of the final blog post/presentation topics to one or two characters. Keeping a tight focus will help her create an in depth analysis.
3. Think about the following statements in relation to your Blog buddy’s Blog and then provide feedback on each area (constructive praise/criticism):
The Blog is on a topic that has been clearly evident in the Blog posts throughout the semester. All of Nicole’s blog posts are on the topic of the TV show “Grey’s Anatomy.” The topic is clearly evident in all the posts.
The Blog is on a topic that seems to interest my Blog buddy. Nicole’s interest in her topic has two facets that are apparent in her blog. She enjoys the show as a form of entertainment, and she is also interested in issues of gender that exist in the show.
My Blog buddy’s topic is one that has produced a good set of posts that were analytical used gender as a primary category of analysis. Nicole has produced more than the required number of posts in her blog, and they use gender issues as a focus for analysis.
The posts make analytical arguments. The posts are understandable and each post logically outlines and supports the argument presented. The posts were clear, provided insight, evidence, and analysis to connect the topic with the assignment for each of the posts. I think Nicole could make her post’s a little clearer by writing her conclusions very plainly so there’s no mistaking what she’s trying to say. A good example is her photo collage, where she describes how a female intern freaked out when none of the other interns took her seriously because she was a former model. By writing on this incident Nicole is bringing up a number of gender issues including the fact that beautiful women are not perceived as intelligent. Adding a sentence that talks about the issues that are shown here would help the blog be a little clearer and a little stronger analytically.
The sources cited in each post are relevant to the topic and help to aid the understanding of the argument and/or assisted in proving the argument. Increasing the number of sources used in the blog would make Nicole’s blog better. When Nicole does cite readings its very effective. A great example can be found in her second Girls Next Door post. Nicole gives a quick summary of what the Kilbourne piece is about and then uses it to further her arguments. Nicole should use this method of describe and then apply whenever she cites a reading, because it gives her work academically stronger.
The quotes used illustrate a broad range of course readings throughout the semester. Nicole cites three different course readings and use the same reading for more than one post so she is drawing upon new readings every time she writes.
The quotes were clear and succinct; additionally, the material was presented so that I could differentiate the Blog buddy’s ideas from that of the author cited. Nicole’s clearest use of a reading was in her second Girls Next Door post. She described Kilbourne’s ideas and then used then in her analysis so it was very easy to differentiate between Nicole’s ideas and Kilbourne’s.
4. Finally, complete the following:
I thought it was great when you discussed the issue of a gay actor playing a homophobic man.
I found it confusing when you said that Meredith showed her strength in a recent episode. Since I don’t regularly watch the show I could not follow your argument because I had not seen the “recent episode.”
You’re really great at seeing the ways that the women characters are shown as strong and independent. Up until now you’ve briefly discussed how many women characters show their strength so I think an in depth analysis of one or two of those characters would be a great post.
I wish you could focus (more) on/alter/edit/explain/expand on/etc these three things…
· Your conclusions. I think you do a good job of presenting situations that involve gender issues, but going another step forward and describing what issues are involved and how they are related makes blog posts much easier to understand.
· Using readings like how you used the Kilbourne piece in you Girls Next Door blog.
· Keep a tight focus for your posts. Blog post #3 is a good example of a post that is a bit broad since you discuss so many characters. I think you kept a better focus in you latest blog post and it was definitely your best analytical work.